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A Lil Somethin'

Postby Futantxx » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:25 am

I won't be posting my poetry here often, I'm not one to just share my stuff like that. But this one is pretty genuine, so why not. Say what you want about it, I don't really mind.

Colorless

Bronze boy, the days are long gone where I felt like I could confide in you. The ruby sunsets distracted me from what I was to become. Amethist baby.. grey was your color. Your view of life is distorted by your malicious ways towards others.
The orange sunrise was a waking call towards something greater and better and I some how lost the memo to wake up early, watch the yellow as it rose above the hills and the trees and me waiting for you to call, to write, to acknowledge my periwinkle existance beyond my selfless flaunting of trust and loyalty.
My fushia dance wasn't grand enough even though I worked so hard. Silver ways of breaking the habit have reminded me of who I was then, who my goldenself could be now.
±Don't Try To Fix Me I'm Not Broken±
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Postby Xeracy » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:39 am

Love it. I like all the colors you used to paint the scene and set the stage.
kinda like a cloud i was up way up in the sky
and i was feeling some feelings you wouldn't believe.
sometimes i don't believe them myself
and i decided i was never coming down.
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Wed Apr 30, 2003 11:52 am

I like this poem Fautantxx! it has alot of feeling to it! keep on writting you are doing a great job!
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Postby LinzAy » Wed Apr 30, 2003 1:05 pm

I love it! great writing Futant!
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Postby Dreamer » Wed Apr 30, 2003 3:54 pm

My Thoughts would be to post your poetry to the site instead of the message board

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Postby Leah06 » Wed Apr 30, 2003 6:29 pm

I agree with dreamer! It is really good! and not as many people will see it here on the forum because most dont have it!
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Postby Brenda Michelle » Wed Apr 30, 2003 7:57 pm

ya, you really should post it on the site! i would also love to read more of your poetry! :mrgreen:
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Postby Futantxx » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:04 pm

I wasn't expecting all these replies. Thanks everyone.

However, I've never been to the "site", just here on the board. Something tells me I'll be posting poetry on here so that less people will be able to see it. *laughs*

I've been writing poetry since I was 15 years old, so I have quite a few under my belt. This was just the tippity tip of the iceburg.
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Postby Luc » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:06 pm

mind the asking of how old are you at the moment?
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Postby Futantxx » Wed Apr 30, 2003 9:11 pm

Nope, I don't mind. I'm 25 *dies* Ok, so maybe I mind the age... but not you askin hehe
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