Sometimes Simplicity Soothes The Soul by Pamela O'Brien

Sometime in the middle of last week,
I decided to allow my subconscience to speak.

Sometime between now and yesterday,
I threw all my inhibitions away.

Sometime in the past few minutes,
I took a moment to treasure my life and all thats in it.

Sometime just a few seconds ago,
I closed my eyes and listened to my blood flow.

Sometime since the first line of this poem,
I lost track of where my train of thought was goin...

Luc (67.37.184.125) -- Monday, December 2 2002, 10:51 pm

nice
i liked it. the last two lines really cought my attention.

Pamela (66.38.146.184) -- Tuesday, December 3 2002, 01:03 am

Last Two Lines
I noticed that you always comment on the last few lines and I like that - I think an extremely effective poem has a BANG ending that leaves the reader thinking for a few minutes you know? So it means alot to hear you say that the last few lines caught your attention.

Capricorn (62.30.192.1) -- Tuesday, December 3 2002, 10:22 am

I agree
Agood poem Pam and I agree about the last 2 lines - agood ending makes you remember a poem

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