Haiku Afternoon by Pondering Red

the prettiest girl
talking on the phone
she rolls tobacco for me

a thousand leaves wave
they crackle in unison
sky turns very grey

tv talk show blares
she flings her long blonde hair back
a horn blares outside

this afternoon fades
city buses are screeching
i am lost in thought

i await this night
your nervous footsteps echoe
sky turns almost white

Haiku
Use no more than 17 syllables
. Arrange these often in lines of 5-7-5 syllables ( but first verse i used 5-5-7)
Avoid similes and metaphors

Capricorn (62.30.192.1) -- Tuesday, November 19 2002, 04:35 pm

I Like
I've had a go at writing Haiku but never got past 2 verses. I like this very much - very clever!

Pamela (66.38.146.88) -- Wednesday, November 20 2002, 04:55 am

You Have A Knack.....
You have a wonderful way with descriptive imagery poems. Every time I read one I can sense the atmosphere, as if I could close my eyes, and when I opened them I would be in that place. I don't know how you do it but its amazing.

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