Emotionless Face
20 August, 2003
Author: Seizure
(2 of 3)
Hey, you up to chill? Na, not up to it
How about a film? Man what don't you get?
I want to be alone, so get out of here
Yeah, we are best friends, You don't need to cheer
Me up anymore, I don't fucking care
I'm so stressed out now, I just need some air.
Well okay then bro, I'll leave you alone
But if you need me, just pick up the phone.
So I walked away, went to see Andrew
I'll tell him all this, he'd know what to do
Drew looked up and said, "Well, it's his birthday
In just a few days, that's not far away."
Yeah, of course, you're right! We'll surprise him then
Take him out to clubs, make him smile again
So we planned it out, he's sure to flip out
He'd do it for me, that's what we're about
The day finally came, Drew waited outside
I went right on in, and made him decide
To go with us then, and chill with us all
"Man, go on ahead, I gotta make a call"
So we waited there, for quite a while
I reached for my phone, so I could dial
But I left it there, I went back to his place
I found him on the floor, all life left his face
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Comments on this poem/writing:
| Terrie* (65.136.7.115) -- Monday, August 25 2003, 02:56 am Seizure, this was so..sad...along w/the other one i just read..i can relate to this..my brother-in-law (my deceased husbands only biological brother)committed suicide 5 days after his birthday..05/2003(due to his divorce ..the woman took him to the cleaners big time... according to his buddies @ the prison he worked @) so many unanswered questions...thank you for sharing such a heartfelt piece of your life..with us .it drew tears to the surface...and can't get rid of this lump in my throat..your writtings are very moving...Terrie* |
| Seizure (68.155.222.214) -- Monday, August 25 2003, 04:28 am While this one had a few personal elements in it to make it seem more my style, the main point of it did not reflect my life. Some guy that stole a lot of people's poems (acrediting himself) posted a big story and asked us to write about it. My contribution was this three parter. I called him out when I handed them over on his deceit and stealing of other's work. To make me feel guilty, he sent me his suicide note. Well there you have it, at least I can say the words are mine. |
| Ash (65.73.59.237) -- Monday, August 25 2003, 09:33 pm I agree with terrie's comments, you're work is wonderful and did the guy actually end up commiting suicide? |
| Seizure (68.155.222.214) -- Tuesday, August 26 2003, 05:20 am I seriously doubt he actually killed himself. Seemed more like an attention plea to me. It happens a lot these days, I've grown pretty insensitive to people unless I know their feelings are genuine. Some call it cold, I call it honesty. |
| keila (195.93.33.14) -- Wednesday, August 27 2003, 06:08 pm am I stupid to cry at this? |
| Ash (65.73.59.238) -- Thursday, August 28 2003, 09:50 pm in my opinion suicide is not a thing to joke about but it seems that more and more ppl are saying they are suicidal for attn which seems really dumb to me because ppl that are actually suicidal probably dont want to be. |
| LinzAy (207.30.1.2) -- Wednesday, September 17 2003, 01:25 am Man, this is what i get for being gone all the time. Stealing ppl's poems? PPL's fromt he site or others? Anyways....loved it. Great 2nd part of the trio. |
| Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 07:16 pm Keila, no, you're not stupid to cry at whatever you wish. Why would you think otherwise? Ash, I'm in agreement with you there. I think it is very stupid for people to be so self centered they have to crave attention by threatening their own life. LinzAy, as far as I know, most of the poems that were stolen came from 2 Pac's web site. |
| Ashley R (66.53.130.215) -- Sunday, October 19 2003, 05:40 pm So, what happened to him, when he was on the floor. Cuz i read # 1 and 3 (very good, by the way), but doesn't your friend die in the third one? I dont know, maybe i cant read between the lines. |
| Seizure (68.19.43.36) -- Sunday, October 19 2003, 07:52 pm When the last line reads, "all life has left his face" he's supposed to be dead. Just in a poetic description. The third poem in that short series is the Eulogy for him. I guess I could have made that more apparant. |
| Ashley R. (66.53.129.57) -- Wednesday, October 22 2003, 03:57 am Sorry, I just cant get hints. I mean i know what a eulogy is, i guess it just didn't really knock me on the head till now. But dont blame urself, the poem was perfect! I guess i could always dye my hair blonde (no offense blondes that are oput there.) |
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