Digital Bath
9 July, 2003
Author: Seizure
Laying in the bathtub, watching the TV
A girl all by herself, a girl that is not free
She has no expression, skin has lost it's tone
Tears ran down her face, she was all alone
The water turned cold, but she didn't care
She is so empty, she's in such despair
Everything that's good, everything that's right
Faded like a star, that used to shine so bright
Her favorite show is on, it doesn't make her laugh
No one cares enough to help on her behalf
She holds it all inside, it is killing her
It is a sickness, for which there is no cure
She can't hear the sound, made from the TV
Is she still alive? She has no guarantee
She is so skinny, she is so pale
She wishes her heart, would finally fail
The water's now ice, still she doesn't move
Her eyelids turn purple, what's left to improve?
Her legs are scarred up, from her sharpest knife
Still she doesn't want, to continue life
Someone could help her, but no one wants to
She is fading fast, she's "that girl we knew"
She is not happy, with where her life has been
Finally she looked up, and pulled the TV in
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Comments on this poem/writing:
| Stacey (68.82.126.206) -- Wednesday, July 30 2003, 07:45 pm Seiz, I realize I smothered you with compliments yesterday on aol, but i figure... since i was the first to read it, i should be the first to say... I absolutely love this poem. I also have a request to put music with it. Let me know what you think. |
| Crimson Angel (12.249.164.87) -- Wednesday, July 30 2003, 08:22 pm Very nice work! I enjoyed reading it very much! Reminding me of alot of things, it sparks something in me, like an inner light, which comforts me, as I read it. I read it many times, only to like it more then the last. Very good work, and keep writing! :-) |
| Seizure (68.155.193.145) -- Thursday, July 31 2003, 10:28 pm I'm glad you two at least appreciated it... i thought it might be "too much" for some people. |
| luc (68.74.116.248) -- Saturday, August 2 2003, 12:03 am how is that too much? People these days dont get enough of the "bad side" of life, which in my opinion they should know, instead of liveing in their "perfect" bubble. good poem, like aways.. |
| Seizure (68.155.193.145) -- Saturday, August 2 2003, 10:56 am It's too much because the mentality of people these days seems to lean more toward censorship than actual speaking of the mind. They live in their "perfect" bubble.. i'm glad I burst it for them. I appreciate the comment Luc... |
| Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Thursday, August 7 2003, 04:12 pm Great poem! I loved it! And what an ending! Great job! |
| Seizure (68.155.222.214) -- Sunday, August 17 2003, 05:25 am thank you leah06... always appreciated. This is one of my favorite works... but I don't think many people would agree sadly... |
| keila (195.93.34.7) -- Wednesday, August 27 2003, 06:12 pm seizure......wow......that was really amazing......all of your works, especially ones like this, leave me stunned....shocked...by the time I've finished reading them. They're so fantastic... |
| LinzAy (207.30.1.2) -- Wednesday, September 17 2003, 01:32 am This is great Seiz. Love the ending! It's a beautiful poem in a sad sort of way. |
| Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Friday, September 19 2003, 07:10 pm This is one of my favorite poems ever... I also love how the title must be interpreted... I don't know how many actually caught that. Thanks for the comments everyone. |
| Stace (68.82.126.206) -- Saturday, September 20 2003, 12:00 am i kind of took the title as "f**k life, i'm washing it all away " i mean, digital pertains to finger... right? well, i just assumed that as the "middle" finger. i'm not really quite sure how to explain it. I really think it's the perfect title for such an excellent piece of work though. am i anywhere close to the meaning Seiz? |
| Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Saturday, September 20 2003, 02:30 am nope |
| Stace (68.82.126.206) -- Saturday, September 20 2003, 03:35 pm so.. are you going to help me out here? or must i toss and turn everynight wondering what the true meaning is? (smirk) |
| Seizure (68.158.39.20) -- Saturday, September 20 2003, 08:10 pm am i gonna help you out? nope. must you toss and turn every night? yup. I think you have my email if you really want to know what it's about. I'd prefer most people to get their own meaning from the title like you did. Even if it's not what I intended it for... |
| Ashley R (66.53.130.215) -- Sunday, October 19 2003, 05:43 pm Yet, another good poem. I dont know what to say, xcept 4, i'm sorry |
| Seizure (68.19.43.36) -- Sunday, October 19 2003, 07:55 pm You've been doing a lot of reading today haven't you Ashley R? I really appreciate the comments, I hope I don't disapoint your expectations in the future. |
| Seizure (68.19.43.36) -- Sunday, October 19 2003, 07:55 pm Forgive the typos in the above post. Not my day today if you know what I mean. |
| Timothy Reynolds (216.165.189.21) -- Monday, October 20 2003, 02:30 am It's nice to let people that there is a terrible side to life. But what about the poor person thinking about doing this tonight and decides to read only your poem dealing with this. Great encouragement for them to go on huh? While you write good poetry, try putting a little hope at the end. You'll still be here tomorrow, I hope they will!!!! By the way Romeo and Juliet is a tragedy! The morrow of the story is not that death is beautiful, but if either one would have gave it another chance, they would have gotten to enjoy each other for the rest of their days before returning to The Father!!! |
| Seizure (68.19.43.36) -- Monday, October 20 2003, 06:01 am I honestly don't care about encouraging other people with my poems. I seriously hope no one else does either. While it may sound selfish, I disagree. I think it is far more selfish compromising your artistic vision and personal feelings trying to please everyone. Who cares? That to me is like the people that blame artists such as Eminem and Marilyn Manson for kids that commit suicide that also listen to their music. I think that is completely idiotic on their part... Eminem and Manson are artists, if someone is going to kill themselves over a form of entertainment, that's one less idiot in the world. I will never feel sorry for such a person. If they are unstable enough to let a song, videogame, or movie end it for them, they weren't far from it anyway. I'd prefer to worry about the people that have real problems (such as living on the streets starving or sitting in class worrying about guns, drugs, and intolerance)... not the unstable dolt. On a final note, how would you know if I'm here tomorrow or not? You don't know who I am or what I go through. You don't know anything about me, stop pretending you do. Good day. |
| Martin Vann (171.75.220.224) -- Monday, October 20 2003, 04:14 pm Seiz, As a human race, that is all most of us do, race, race, race. Sometimes we will stop and stare at another's pain, then we continue to run our own race. Your poetry is always a challenge, the truth it contains, and be squezed and freed in so many ways. One poem may show no heart at all, just a glob of pulsating flesh, mixed with a high degree of life's course sand. Then again, you have shown a more tender hand, in other poems and I have read your comments to others, where you lent, a helping hand. this is eazy for me to write, because I'm not thinking, I'm powered by your personality, your ever changing, dynamic being. So, thar you go Mr. Seizure, outstanding poem, I took from it what I wanted and threw the rest away. Gotta say, none of hit the garbage can. MartinV |
| Ashley R. (66.53.129.57) -- Wednesday, October 22 2003, 04:05 am I guess i have been reading that day. I dont know, its just sumthing bout ur poems, always wanting to read the next one and the next. Like an addiction. Yu just dont know what will be next. |
| Katie (216.138.1.10) -- Sunday, March 25 2007, 11:40 pm I am sure you are a nice person but this is so predictable, poems about sucide and despair are seen so often. The rhyme scheme of alone and tone, right and bright lack thought and are obvious. The people who complement it miss spell you (yu). Put time in to your peoms, express somthing that you know, write what comes to you not what fits the rhyme scheme. You have potential, just study the greats, the meanings behind, the style, learn from the best, |
| barb (67.58.206.225) -- Saturday, March 31 2007, 02:31 am Why do people want to add misery to others. If you have a rough time in life, you know how negative thoughts and depressing thoughts affect you. To get nice, thoughtful help, you have to give it. A bad attitude gets you a bad life. |
| Icytears (88.111.7.2) -- Saturday, March 31 2007, 10:34 pm I like your poem a lot, the ending is very unique, the change is very effective. Katie: you spelt 'compliment' wrong and mistyped 'poems' don't correct others and make mistakes, it's very hypocritical. |
| barb (67.58.207.101) -- Sunday, April 1 2007, 05:11 pm We are here for fun not perfection. Katie the spelling we all make spelling mistakes.This site Katie is for practice and fun. Don't worry about comments from a perfectionists. |
| Seizure (69.250.238.244) -- Monday, January 18 2016, 10:16 am @Katie- I know it was a while ago, and you intended to thoroughly crush my work (as well as criticize a comment section.. really?). But I'll just leave it with this... Poetry is from the mind of the person writing it. If I have to study someone else to "make great poetry," then I feel it is no longer mine. To address your other comments, my rhyme scheme and syllable structure exist because I'm obsessive compulsive, not because I'm letting "rhyme-scheme write it." Good day. |
| mental (172.58.152.98) -- Wednesday, February 10 2016, 02:37 am first great poem second poetry is not about censorship it's what the human body feels and releases through words hence what is censorship. third digital bath to me means either the tv light is splashing over the water on to the body in the water or electrocution. thank you |
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