Oppugn -11
27 April, 2003
Author: Seizure
Hey mother f**er, you want to fight me?
I will not stop you, that I guarantee
As a matter of fact, I'm gonna help you out
I'll give you the first swing in our pending bout
So go ahead, throw down, I'm looking forward to this
May you never find a state of eternal bliss
I'm gonna see to that, I'll put you through a hell
One you can't imagine even though we both fell
I'm gonna grab your jaw, I'm gonna rip it off
I'm gonna pound your gut until you make a cough
Then I will take your tongue, and I will rip it out
You think I'm playing, bitch, I'm not devout
I do not give a f*ck about your god or you
Look me in the eye and tell me it's not true
I am far from joking, so you better swing
I want you to feel the hate that I always bring
Oh you're starting to seize, what are you going to do?
Now I'm not pinned down why don't you carry through
What you always wanted, and rip me apart
It's gonna take a lot of work so you better start
I'm here calling you out, I heard all that sh*t
You gotta swing on people when you can't be hit
That's a cowardly act, why don't you take me now?
I think you really want to but you don't know how
I'm gonna spell it out for you god d*mn coward
I wonder why you're the one that's been empowerd
With welcoming the souls, into this firey place
Do you even look each one in the face?
Judging from how you act, I'd say that's a no
You're like a fukkin' child that will never grow
I can see it now he is getting pissed
He's no longer frozen and he's made a fist
------- Author's Notes -------
This is the followup to Surreptitious. The story continues next poem. |
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Comments on this poem/writing:
| LinzAy (205.188.209.82) -- Tuesday, April 29 2003, 07:51 am Awesome Seiz! This part sounded more like it was coming more from the real world and experiences, where as the others sound more less like that. It had a rap flow to it to me. You write this during that little time on the Message Board? Good addition Seiz! |
| Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Wednesday, April 30 2003, 04:23 am this is awsome sezure! great work! |
| Seizure (67.33.97.120) -- Wednesday, April 30 2003, 06:20 am You'll be happy to know the story is done and should be in Dreamer's inbox right now. With the next update, it'll all be over. I reduced the amount of poems in the story from 20 to 14 to keep it more interesting and not beat around the bush. But that's it... it's all done... so the two people that have read the story to this point, there ya go... I finished it for you guys. I'm out... |
| Roy (205.188.209.82) -- Wednesday, April 30 2003, 12:21 pm Man Seizure I would hope not be on the recieving end of this poem. I have got that compelled to write something like this myself in my anger. |
| Seizure (67.33.97.120) -- Wednesday, April 30 2003, 02:06 pm Then I suggest you do write something like this when the mood strikes you. You may feel better afterward. I do. |
| Roy (205.188.209.82) -- Thursday, May 1 2003, 01:03 pm bring out the devil in me Sez---I will consider your suggestion the next time someone gets in my face with verbal threats and his first swing. I would bite off his ear and wash his mouth out with it! |
| Leah06 (12.232.5.189) -- Friday, May 2 2003, 03:19 am I dont want you to leave!!! I cant figure out the title to you book.... i tried (i think is is the whole blonde thing) |
| Martin Vann (67.28.88.207) -- Friday, May 2 2003, 02:31 pm No matter how strong, controled, devout are what ever, there is a point in us all, a point that goes past anger, frustration or despair. This point can be reached, and we need to realize, it is there, with in us all. Just my opinion, I would say, Seiz, you have done a job of self-expression here in addition to speaking what others fear to say in public, in a loud and clear voice, yet a voice, that ripples with the sound of an internal hell. Truth and be pretty and gracefull or it can by ugly and abrasive, if it is expressed as we feel it, then well, we can all make our own decisions. MartinV |
| Roy (152.163.189.170) -- Friday, May 2 2003, 06:05 pm Right on Martin! but some how this one knocked the sh*t outta me---ah--I wrote one for you Sez-- it ain't bad but it is written for you typed in your name to honor---I'm sure Dreamer will ask you and I hope she does and hope you accept for a posting. Don't get me wrong "Not everyone can play the game"some poet artist said but I can sit in the stadium to shout horray or boo! you are a foot ball player that is in for the offence and defence. Run that ball or are cut them off at the scrimage line! |
| Justus Isaiah Richardson (198.81.26.75) -- Saturday, May 3 2003, 12:46 am I feel the same way from time to time except for the hate part. However, I would not word it quite that way when I know children might be reading. But that's just me. Justus |
| Seizure (216.47.215.144) -- Saturday, May 3 2003, 08:22 am Leah06, sorry you can't figure out the title of the story... all you really have to do is go through the story poems in order... (I, II, III, IV, V, VI, VII, VIII, IX, X, XI, XII, XIII, XIV) and snag the letter/space characters left at the bottom of each one. Make sure it's in order, otherwise it will be kinda hard to spell out the title. Martin, I appreciate the comment. I would like you to check out the one you inspired to see if I did your vision justice though... Even if you hate it, I'd like to know that too... I gave it a shot... Roy, I got the poem, looked it over, and appreciated it greatly. I will leave a more in depth comment on it when it posts Sunday. Justus, in my opinion, anyone that can say they don't feel hatred toward anyone is a much bigger person than I am. I can admit that... I am filled with hatred, depression, and desperation which is reflected in my poems. But personally, I think if there are children mature enough to read and take in poetry for what it's worth, then they are mature enough to see the deeper meaning behind the used vulgarity. |
| Roy (64.12.96.14) -- Saturday, May 3 2003, 01:43 pm there i go thinking again/just a mild tremer not any earthquake---What happened to parental control? my grandchild cant |
| Roy (205.188.209.82) -- Saturday, May 3 2003, 06:08 pm my only is parental control Justus---so you do not like profanity and I do not either except(refer to seizure)I bow to parental control(snip) |
| Seizure (216.47.215.144) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 12:18 am Um... I don't know if you just insulted me or not there Roy. If you did, go ahead and let it out (preferably in poem form, or email)... if not, I request you make it easier to tell who you're talking about. |
| Justus Isaiah Richardson (205.188.209.82) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 01:37 am That seemed more directed at me than you Seizure. Oh well, you can't please everyone. Anyway, I agree that many kids are mature enough to read and take in what you write. The reason I don't write with profanity, and believe me, I've used every dirty word in the book growing up on the streets, is there is always a chance that a child, not mature enough to read and take it in will happen upon it. I was forced by my environment to grow up too fast. I wouldn't wish that off on anyone. There's time enough for maturity when we grow up and get out on our own. I'm sure you know what I mean when I say, life when we mature and are out on our own can really suck. I just try not to do anything to speed up the process any more than society already has. I can identify with what you are saying in this poem. Its almost exactly what I would have said not long ago. In fact, I was saying things like that when I was 11 and runnin' with the pack. I won't tell you how far I fell, but the Ten Commandments? I broke every one. So I am not a bigger person than you are Seizure, because all I was for as long as I can remember was the embodiment of hate. Even in the Air Force, I had authority issues. Spent a lot of time locked up for kicking the crap out of a couple of Tech Sergeants who wouldn't get out of my face. Yeah hate, I knew it well. Anyway, I'm ramblin'. So that's the reason I don't write about things like that, or use that kind of language. I just think kids shouldn't be worrying about adult things, there's plenty of time for that misery when they grow up. Right now, there's Disneyland, Six Flags, Chuck E. Cheese, Arcades, Little League, The Park, and all the things mature kids like I was never got to do. You're a good writer Seizure. You are great at putting your thoughts and feelings on paper. This piece took me back to places I'd hoped never to visit again, to faces I'd almost managed to erase from my dreams, to the sins I know I will answer for one day. Justus |
| Roy (64.12.96.14) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 02:35 am Seizure--I got a print this one!means a lot to me.This no fairyland like some may think---hey hehe really this not fer kids like JIR---been there! Sorry I am use this space of yours over what I find good Poetry---can I get angry? yeah! Now what I would like is a personal signiture on this poem to be with me in when I die---okay? |
| Roy (64.12.96.14) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 02:47 am read again---and I will also--yeah sez yer right I directed to Mr. JIR! SORRY---LITTLE man is upseting me! Need I say more----don't ya think so? aaaahhhh |
| Seizure (216.47.215.144) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 03:36 am Justus, I understand where you're coming from... and can appreciate your view there. Roy, you would like a personal signature on this poem? If you really want one that can be arranged. If you're serious, get up with Dreamer for contact information. |
| Roy (64.12.96.14) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 04:38 am Yes very much so on "Oppugns" may I be picky? on signature? thanks wowzer wordless---do this for ---really!---One day!Those words---I put my foot down with anger like this with being two shoed---I will make arrangments on my side right now-- thanks bye |
| Justus Isaiah Richardson (64.12.96.14) -- Sunday, May 4 2003, 12:57 pm Roy, don't take that the wrong way. I'm not saying you're an alcoholic or on meds. I've just noticed a discontinuity in some of your comments of late and it concerns me. I've seen that kind of thing in some of the people I work with and hoped that you weren't going through anything like that yourself. I really do hope that nothing bad has happened in your life to bring on this change, but If you'd like to talk, contact Becky and she can get you my e-mail. Seizure, just remember, you're not alone when it comes to the kinds of things you're expressing in this work. You ever need to talk, have Becky hook us up. |
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