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I Could See The Sunrise
1 September, 2004
Author: Mental

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i could see the sunrise
i could see the moon
i could feel the notion
that you'll be leaving soon.
i could hear the talk
whispering within
you'd stop talking
with lips so thin.
light in the room growing thinner
as the moon glimmers over
somehow eager to withdrawl
i throw my heart over my shoulder.

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Comments on this poem/writing:

megan (205.188.116.200) -- Wednesday, September 1 2004, 06:55 am

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very deep , great job
-megan-
Your Melody (207.190.93.140) -- Thursday, September 2 2004, 03:25 am

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Wow...i mean, just...wow.
joyce ivy (68.222.111.69) -- Thursday, September 2 2004, 08:08 pm

wow

very ,very deep..i like
Terrie* (65.148.230.26) -- Friday, September 3 2004, 02:05 am

Mental, Fantastic job..very brilliant...

i love your detailed descrption, i could close my eyes and envision the sunrise and that far...... away moon...well done..
viper (71.68.230.145) -- Friday, January 17 2014, 02:39 am

yes

I get the feeling you were rejected as you gave your heart nowhere to put but over your shoulder. nice write
 
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