Week 4

This is a category for playing around with our talents for writing

Postby Luc » Wed Jun 11, 2003 6:40 pm

im guessing friday.. if the thing did start on a monday. so saturday people talk and congrat on the winner and then sunder the winner puts up a poem and then starts off the new week which im sure that on monday people will start posting..

then again thats just my theory on the whole matter.
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Postby xeverettx » Wed Jun 11, 2003 8:21 pm

Hmm i guess i picked a bad topic :?
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Postby LinzAy » Wed Jun 11, 2003 9:35 pm

Revenge Let Go

do you have any clue how you've hurt me?
or how much you made me cry?
you've stabbed me in my back
one too many times

I've had enough of all your lies
and your silly little games
I've had enough of hearing your voice
or just the mention of your name

they all tell me i should get you back
they all plan out "my" revenge
and at first i was along for the ride
but that all came to an end

i realized what you were
and didnt wanna stoop down to your level

so when we happen to meet again
I'll just give you a civil smile
you'll soon end up with no one dear
walkin alone for miles and miles



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Postby Brenda Michelle » Wed Jun 11, 2003 10:43 pm

no everett, it is a great topic! it is very challenging!! thats how it should be! :mrgreen:
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Postby Ghost » Thu Jun 12, 2003 12:44 pm

Double Standard
You tried to keep me locked up for yourself,
Even when you were thousands of miles away.
You wouldn't let me go to parties,
When you went to clubs every weekend.
It was always ok for you to do,
But not me, oh no.
I'm just a defenseless girl,
You didn't think I could stand up for myself,
Well, now I can.
I've finally come out of my shell,
I can look you in the eye and say," I don't need you anymore."
Watching you suffer like I did makes me feel free.
Always remember my dear,
Revenge can be so sweet
When there's a double standard.

~Yeah, this isn't my best, but oh well. It was a good topic and usually I'm more revengeful. What's wrong with me?? :wink:
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Postby Martin Vann » Fri Jun 13, 2003 1:23 pm

To, Luc

I was reading a very honest presentation about your Demon, I had to leave the network to take care of an incoming call. I came back and could not find your comment again, but remember it. My point about your demon is, that you have the courage to admit and share it and yes, we, myself definitely read it. To say I know your pain is hollow, but I will say, you placed your guts on the table for all to see, you are your own"hero", even if you don't know it. I wrote a poem called, the Demon, go read it, Luc, you are not alone and have the guts, to surive it.

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Postby Luc » Fri Jun 13, 2003 5:58 pm

i'll be sure to read it martin.. :)
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Postby xeverettx » Fri Jun 13, 2003 9:26 pm

well this is a very tough decision, of course because everyone here has alot of writing talent. ive read and re-read all the poems many times this week. here we go..the winner this week is...

RubyDragon! nice work Ruby. Nice work everyone! ok Ruby lead us on our next writing adventure :D
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Postby xeverettx » Fri Jun 13, 2003 10:13 pm

Revenge
By All who entered. 8)

Oh so sweet, will your blood, taste apon my hands
Crouched above you
Soaked in your crimson velvet

Anger Takes Hold of my throat
as the tears keep flowing from me.
Watching you suffer like i did makes me feel free.

You've hurt me.
Do you have any clue how you've hurt me?
You'll soon end up with no one dear
how lovely it is, to finally ease away my fears.

Oh how sweet, will your screams, ring in my ears
She screams
She yells
who'd have thought it would end like this?

But look at you now
watching you suffocate and choke
So sad and alone
Revenge can be so sweet

Feeling pity for the way you are
my soul now has another scar
oh wonderfully sweet, when your under the land
And thats how she will stay

I realized what you were
Now I realise where I need to be
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Postby Guest » Fri Jun 13, 2003 10:55 pm

Congratulations Ruby! Hurray, hurray!
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